I watch the ripples change their size
But never leave the stream
Of warm impermanence
And so the days float through my eyes
But still the days seem the same
And these children that you spit on
As they try to change their worlds
Are immune to your consultations
They're quite aware of what they're goin' through

Saturday, October 25, 2008

Lighting Strikes Twice

Rewrote/edited Lightning. It's now 4041 words, and I cut about 100 to 250 words out of the original, and changed a parcel load of the sentences around, mixed up paragraphs, and restructured the end.

2 comments:

Ken McConnell said...

Your post title had me thinking you sold another story! ;)

Steve Buchheit said...

Sorry Ken, didn't mean to mislead you, was just rifting on the story title and the fact that I didn't expect to rewrite/edit it this weekend.