This is why you should get a Muse. Blam-o, right out of the sky while I was ::cough:: indisposed of one day at work.
"Her hair was a coppery red and her eyes the color of purple twilight. the fragrance of midnight shade in an apple orchard surrounded her. After he had been successful, he purchased an orchard to work his retirement away in sweet cider-press bliss. When she brushed past him, just the hairs on their arms reached out for each other like their bodies were filled with electricity that needed to pass to the other and he thought of the foxtail clip again...
"She didn't say that she would marry him, but that they had already been married (scene of him making a twisted dew-grass ring) and she was just waiting for him to realize that."
Okay, the second paragraph is more like story notes than actual text. There were also notes about the foxtail clip and how the touch of the moon was just like that. The text above is about the main character's childhood girlfriend that he ends up marrying. She's also a "substitute/analog/daughter of" the moon. The story has transformation and growth of the character. The "conflict" is mostly between him and his Dad, but I'm not sure that's enough. Does that make for a good story? I don't know.
2 comments:
Pretty! Roll with it, see where it goes. Or do you not write like that?
I'm almost never at the helm when I write; the story drives the story. All I usually get in advance is a fleeting glance into the action, or a line or a string of words.
I don't normally write that way until the second or third rewrite when I start looking at things like, is this section or description understandable. It's fun to get these pieces when I don't think I'm really thinking about the story.
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