This evening I ended up rewriting the ending in a continuous improvement process. I lost count of how many times I've gone through it. There's a lot of new stuff, and most of the old is said in a different way. I needed to change it to be more of a Temptation of Ben Yoder that it was. I think I made that. And Ben still says, basically, get thee behind me.
If I say, "His doctor was surprised, but ended up giving him advice about gift horses," you all know what I'm talking about, right? That one was a way of cutting about twenty words. We're at 4679 words. Down 90 some, and I haven't looked back through the whole story. Yet.
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